Vidu's Sadat Paragraph

There are some changes I've made but this is a very good example of how the 'P' and 'A' of GOPAL have been facilitated cleverly by Vidu to hold a cogent and persuasive argument regarding Sadat...well done, Vidu!

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Anwar Sadat conveys unity predominantly through interactivity with the Israeli audience, impacting and engaging the audience of the Knesset, by using commonly believed justifications to back up his argument, and by instilling a sense of immediacy. Sadat uses the imperative and the second person “You, bewailing mother, you, widowed wife; you, the son who lost a brother or a father; you, all victims or wars” to interact with the audience and convey a sense of immediacy, the imagery sorrow [T1] is evident and through the repetition of “you” it is evident that Sadat is emphasizing that all have lost something in war. Imagery and accumulation such as “the plight of bloodshed, death, orphans, widowhood, family disintegration and the wailing of victims”  impact the beliefs held by the Israeli Knesset of warring, and highlights that warring has effectively hurt both the Israelis and the Arabs in numerous way. Through the use of biblical allusion “Gods teachings and commandments are love, sincerity, purity and peace” Sadat sets about justifying the necessity for peaceful unity through quoting the teaching of God, a figure that is central to both Israelis and Arabs beliefs irrespective of religion.

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 [T1]sorrowful imagery

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Mike Z's Deane Paragraph

With a couple of minor changes, please read Mike's Deane paragraph. Very clever. See how instead of writing a whole paragraph about context, he actually incorporates it into the paragraph itself? Adds a level of cleverosity...

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Sir William Deane’s phlegmatic[T1]  tone encourages those affected to be amalgamated in their unity. Deane is concise and perspicuous, ensuring the audience is kept in captivation and is left with a positive elucidation. Deane advocates unity between those affected by the tragedy, quoting John Donne, a prominent writer of Literature, “As John Donne wrote, no man is an island. Anyone’s death diminishes us all because we are all involved in humanity.” This personification involves all of the audience and embroils them all in humanity, thereby unifying them. Through[T2]  the juxtaposition, “ Australia and Switzerland are on opposite sides of the globe…bring our countries closer together,” Deane contrasts the countries as being opposite to each other, yet the commonality of lives being lost brings them together, furthering[T3]  John Donne’s quote. William Deane’s speech is more relevant to us today than when it was made, as more Australians are travelling overseas more than ever before and the probability of something like this incident happening is more likely. Deane’s discourse can be paralleled to Paul Keating and Anwar Sadat’s, as they all speak in the name of those who have died and seek to aid the situation. In Sadat’s case he aspires to end the conflict and therefore prevent lives being lost and also talks about those who died. Deane and Keating both seek to leave those related to the victims at peace and to mourn their loss[T4] .

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 [T1]I know what you mean by this BUT phlegmatic – as a word – has connotations that he was unemotional. He was far from that. In fact, it was his calm yet emotional manner that made the speech all the more poignant.

 [T2]Two good points here.

 [T3]reiterating

 [T4]Good points.

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Well done, Mike.

Simon's Keating Paragraph

Have a read of how Simon has used his well-chosen quotes to weave a paragraph around the Keating speech...

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The “Unknown Soldier” represents all those soldiers that went to war and lost their lives fighting for their country. Paul Keating’s emotional speech on this offered a sense of closure, appealing to the many families that lost someone due to the war. Keating speaks of uniting as a country and honouring these men. He uses juxtaposition to essentially contrast what Australia got out of the war, and what was lost. “We have lost more than 100,000 lives and with them all their love of this country and all their hope and energy…we have gained a legend…a deeper understanding of what it is to be Australian.” Keating is directly engaging all Australians and reflecting upon patriotism, furthermore, he is uniting the audience and instilling pride and passion within them for their country. He promotes a higher sense of unity in the audience by using colloquial language to appeal to what it means to be Australian, and the legend the war heroes created. “To endure hardship, to show courage, to be bold as well as resilient, to believe in ourselves and to stick together,” is the language Keating uses to achieve this sense of patriotism. His speech is still convincing today because it typically refers to peace, and with the world that we live in, many people can relate to this theme. The speech is a constant reminder of the immense costs of war.

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It's not a perfect paragraph but it gives some of you an example of how to structure your body paragraphs. Well done, Simon.

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Week Three and Easy...like a bird

Week 3 Essay Topic

You will note how the previous essay topic is designed around unity - a thematic essay. Now we need to ensure that you have an understanding of audience.


"A truly eternal speech must use clever techniques and devices to ensure it appeals not only to the audience at the time, but also for audiences in the future."


Discuss this statement with reference to the speeches of Aung San Suu Kyi and Anwar Sadat.


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But, Sir, it's only Week 2...

Yes, but you still have to write me an essay.

Sadat, Deane and Keating all speak about unity in various forms. 


How do they do this and why would their speeches have been convincing to both their intended audiences and modern audiences? (900 words)


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For the purposes of this question, discuss each speech in order (whichever order you like). While your essay in Week 5 will need more sophistication, we will tackle the structure of this in latter weeks.


This is to be completed in the double period on Wednesday, though you may like to start thinking about your content or similarities/differences in each speech.


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It's essay as 1,2,3...

Hi Chris and all others who are looking for essay topics...which, by default, should be all of you in the next week or so...

Please look on pages 33-35 of your yellow booklet for seven past questions. They are all very good examples and there are even helpful annotations that will assist in your decoding of the questions and formulating an answer that is absolute and plenary in nature.

In response to a question another lad asked me today, please be aware that your opinions, while necessitating a certain uniformity, can also be more heterodox in nature. Challenge the norms of what everyone else thinks. Remember, in English, while there are certain immovable constancies, if you think you can prove something that you believe in an academic and cogent fashion, reach for the stars.

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Nick of time...

Guys, please read the following as an excerpt from Nick's essay - well done to him on its composition. There were many part of his essay that were very good. Please read what he has written and then read my comments below.
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One of Sadat’s most memorable themes is the value of “permanent peace based on justice”. Sadat employs a range of rhetorical devices such as emotive language, repetition, enumeration, imagery and juxtaposition to ensure his audience is convinced of the value of “permanent peace based on justice” and remembers the idea. Words such as “annihilate”, “bereavement” and “rejection” are used to force his audience to experience how it feels to live without “permanent peace based on justice”. The repetition of the phrase emphasizes that this idea is one of his key concepts, and also allows the phrase to be brought up again in the audiences mind allowing the concept to ‘sink in’. Sadat also uses enumeration, structuring his arguments as “the first fact”, “the fifth fact” etc, and later, when stating his conditions for peace he uses “first, second, third”. This technique allows his audience to better follow his train of thought and clearly understand how he has come to these conclusions and making his argument seem more logical and correct. Also, by stating his arguments as a “fact” he gives them more authority. Lastly, Sadat uses imagery to portray two possible futures. One is of “the ruins of what mankind has built and the remains of the victims of mankind”; the other is of “a smile on the face of every child born on our land”. By juxtaposing such extreme vision Sadat forces his audience to agree with his pint by appealing to a common goal of a better future. Sadat ensures his audience remembers the idea of “permanent peace based on justice” by employing a number of rhetorical devices to ensure they both understand and agree with the idea.

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Some of you may have picked up on this but see how Nick has listed the techniques before going into more detail of his analysis? This is a no-no. Just have a little more contextual information at the beginning of your paragraphs (if you choose to structure your work in this way) and then get into your analysis.

Remember GOPAL? Don't worry about sticking to GOPAL perfectly but you must understand that each body paragraph (and they can be only a third of what Nick has done above) must be either thematic (that uses techniques in analysis) OR technique-based (which speaks about themes).

Looking closely at Nick's work again, I would prefer him not tohave used the word 'lastly'. I also think his final sentence is a little bland. Have another go, Nick?

Has anyone else got comments on what he's written?

Well done, Nick.